Peer Review 13b

Here is a person from another section that i peer reviewed.

• The name of the title and author for the project you reviewed (1 point)
  • Gabby Dietrich. "Get the Lead Out: Flint Michigan Water Scandal".
   
• A working hyperlink to the project you reviewed (1 point)
  • HYPERLINK to project (just look on her blog post) and my comment. 
  
  
• An explanation of the peer review activity you selected for the project you reviewed (1 point) 
  • I decided to comment on the genre form of her project.  So I looked at the conventions of a  video essay and see what she did and didn't do, and offer suggestions.
  
  
• An explanation of how you think you helped the author with your feedback (in other words, how did you help them make their work better?) (5 points)
  • I think I helped her by giving suggestions that made her video essay more  interesting to viewers.  I suggested where the longer pauses should be, how to improve the "listenability" of her voice, and use of background music to provide more variety and add to her images. Also there wasn't enough opinion for an argument.
   
• An explanation of how you incorporated something from the suggested Student’s Guide readings (or any other course materials, if you’d prefer) into your feedback (5 points)
  • All of the things I suggested above are what we talked about in class.  Without these, your project becomes rather monotonous and you lose the interest of the listeners.
  
  
• One thing about their work that you admired or think you could learn from (5 points) 
  • Your voice is not enough to interest readers.  Seriously, it doesn't matter how beautiful it is.  Without additional elements listeners lose interest.   
  • Also, adding opinion (with reason) will already make the story more captivating, as one is either agreeing or trying to understand the others side.