Peer Review 14

Below I will elaborate on my peer review.

• The name of the title and author for the project you reviewed (1 point)
  • Jianna LoCricchio "Opening Paragraph" (of her reflection video essay)
   
• A working hyperlink to the project you reviewed (1 point)
  • Here is the link to the blog post with the opening paragraph draft.
   
• An explanation of the peer review activity you selected for the project you reviewed (1 point) 
  • I decided to edit the content of her piece.  With this, I evaluate the actual words she has created and how well they convey her message. 
   
• An explanation of how you think you helped the author with your feedback (in other words, how did you help them make their work better?) (5 points)
  • I mostly gave her suggestions on how to better clarify certain portions.  For example, she mentions how "she had to learn things the hard way," but she didn't hint at any of the struggles she encountered and might write about.
  • She should also specify what certain"skills" she meant.  It leaves the reader a little confused and foggy.
   
• An explanation of how you incorporated something from the suggested Student’s Guide readings (or any other course materials, if you’d prefer) into your feedback (5 points)
  • Specificity, as we have talked about in class is key to keeping readers engages.  Without it readers can get confused and not want to continue reading.  
  • I also mentioned how she should make sure the end of her introduction flows well into the next paragraph.  We've learned in class that without these, the projects can sound rather choppy and disorganized.
   
• One thing about their work that you admired or think you could learn from (5 points)
  • I admired how she conveyed her feelings while keeping a formal tone.
  • However,  her lack of specificity makes me realize that I might have to elaborate a little more in my own opening paragraph.